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11 Sec Club November. Crit Please!!
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Gangbanger 8 posts02 Nov 2008Yo guys I'm just doing some planning for the November 11 sec club.
Here's a link to a video of me acting out what I've got so far
http://rylanmattes.com/Nov%20Video%20Ref.mp4
Tell me what you think.
I'm still not sure where this guy is or what he is doing there.
Some ideas I have are,
-A Police chief
-A Superhero who rescued a girl from an accident that was cause by the people he is talking to.
-He's a Dean at a University graduation
-Got any ideas.....?
Here's the audio track transcript
"My purpose in coming here tonight was... twofold. Firstly, I wanted to aid this young lady. Secondly, I was curious to see how a bunch of empty-headed nitwits conducted themselves." -
02 Nov 2008Hmm...well I think the police officer idea is good...and that most of the acting choices work...my main suggestion would be to change the "empty-headed" pose a bit. The audio sounds like he's being demeaning to everyone, but your action looks as if he's trying to remember the phrase "empty headed"....I'd suggest maybe changing it up to a pointing gesture as if he's berating the people who he's speaking to. So...maybe a stern look on his face, and a pointing gesture to a few people in the "audience". Hopefully that helps
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Gangbanger 8 posts13 Nov 2008Alrighty!! I've got sometime to work on this now cuase this is my first week being officially unemployed. Yay!!!!
Here's a little update poses are still a little rough in the blocking pass.
Tell me what yalls think.
http://rylanmattes.com/Nov_Int_Test_R.mp4 -
13 Nov 2008Blocking looks great! Works really well with the audio. Keep going!
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14 Nov 2008very unique nick you have
the blocking looks really good. its a good idea to act first to something like this and then try to recreate it..
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