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zacleck 43 posts
Hey all. There's only six days left til the deadline here so I would LOVE some detailed feedback.
-zac
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BColbourn 2,323 posts
Really nice zac,
on the line "my kin" I think his jaw opens a little too late. and after 'kin' I might hold his mouth open for a little bit.
for how angry the character on the left is, his movements would be slightly quicker
the best animation's definitely on the guy on the left, and that the guy on the right distracts from it. particularly the part where he drinks from the shot. that might be able to be sped up a bit and put right after char left stops talking, before char right starts again. either that or you could put it during the first pause, instead of the 2nd.
speaking of which, overall it seems like character right's visual energy doesn't match up with what he's saying. the animation makes him seem really disinterested in whatever the other guy's saying, but the dialogue sounds like they're both very much into the conversation.
also, the right character's chest seems to be floating about some of the time as well.
The character on the left is really great, you've done a wonderful job with him.
hope I've helped at all, keep thinking I've watched it too many times and that the crits are only in my head.
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zacleck 43 posts
Thanks a lot for taking a look, it's been hard getting detailed feedback. To be honest the guy on the left started off really bad so I've been focusing primarily on fixing him. The guy on the right hasn't made it much past a second pass so it's nice to get some new ideas for him. I guess I always thought of him as being uninterested but I like your feedback so I'll take another look. I'd love to hear your impression on my next post.
-zac
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zacleck 43 posts
well, I'm done working for tonight, so take a look.
The more detailed the critique the better. Repeat yourself if you have to.
-zac
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zacleck 43 posts
All right, I really need some finalizing critiques. I've looked at this thing so many times I can't tell if something looks off or not.
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BColbourn 2,323 posts
looks awesome! one little thing, do his lips actually touch on 'my'? it doesnt look like they do, but i cant be sure because vimeo doesnt do frame by frame
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zacleck 43 posts
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zacleck 43 posts
10th times a charm
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BColbourn 2,323 posts
on 'stole' his eyebrows go up for a while, which i don't remember happening in earlier ones. looks sort of odd, seems like his eyebrows would stay mad the whole time.
edit: if anything, i think his eyebrows should go down on 'stole', not up
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zacleck 43 posts
just read that crit on the eyebrows so I'll look at that before I turn it in, but here's where it's at right now. a little over two days left and I really don't know what more to do with it.
http://vimeo.com/9078494
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zacleck 43 posts
Here it is, my final entry. It's unfortunate that I couldn't light and render this properly but I was animating up until the end, so, it is what it is. Thanks to everyone who commented, it's been fun.
Feel free to critique it still, though, as I'm sure to do another pass and get it rendered good and proper.
-zac.
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BColbourn 2,323 posts
looks great, zac. very polished
hope you win!
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Richard 1,943 posts
yea man! looking good! wish you all the best!
