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Devil Karate Animation
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02 Oct 2007Hi everybody!
I'm putting the finishing touches on this animation and I'd appreciate any feedback. It's my devil character doing karate moves.
Thanks in advance.
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10 Oct 2007Pretty neat man. The shot in general is lacking appeal I think between the form he is doing and the camera movement, but the animation itself is pretty solid. Good weight, good balance, nice movement. The only thing I don't like is the random blink right at the end. He seems very tense and rigid throughout, like he should be in that sort of form, however he blinks at the end randomly like it's no big deal and he isn't trying or something.
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10 Oct 2007Thanks, Jay! I appreciate your taking the time to critique my animation.
Right now I'm re-doing the breakdowns, as well as the initial poses, to help the action along. That's where I saw the most problems when I went over it. I agree with your point about the blink at the end. He wouldn't blink at that time if he was involved in an intense series of actions, so I'll get rid of it. I've tried to improve the staging but I've found that it's really hard to keep the character in frame with any other camera setup. I'll see if I can find any way to improve it, but I'm not sure how at this point.
Thanks again!
EDIT: I'm finding some things I can do with the camera to improve the staging, especially at the end. -
10 Oct 2007Try a lower angle possibly? He is a pretty menacing looking character doing a very rigid traditional form, a lower camera angle will help improve both of those things.
Glad to see you are still looking to improve it though, looking forward to more
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10 Oct 2007Thanks! I'll definitely try the lower camera angle.
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04 Nov 2007Here's the latest revision:
I attempted to try a lower camera angle, but I found it to be very hard to include all of the action without having too much camera motion. I hope this angle is better, but I know it isn't very different from the previous one.
Thanks for all the feedback so far!
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