yeah, I got a similar comment on my acting choices from an old teacher that kind of tanked my optimism on this shot. But like you said, it's time to move on and spend more time on the planning stage this time. I'd really like to take some acting lessons in the near future, but for now I'll just try to get a hold of a camera and film myself.
I'm not sure how to post an audio file so I just ran it through vimeo again. http://vimeo.com/11581684
I really appreciate your interest Global, it's encouraging to know I might have some more help in the early stages of this one.
It feels like three beats again, the laugh, 'well' and 'think'. The character sounds confident so I was thinking the first pose would be him standing tall, arched back a bit, with his hands on his hips while he chuckles. A subtle hand gesture with his right hand on 'well' and a stronger motion on 'think' but still keeping his posture pretty tight, like he doesn't have to sell it too hard because he knows it's good.
Another idea I had was more of a cover-up delivery of the line. Like he showed off something and it fell apart at the most important point, so it'd start with a beat of panic before he tries to cover it up with an uncomfortable laugh, faking the confidence before he asks what they think. This scenario would have more beats and extremes because he's trying to fake confidence to cover up his failure.
A prop wouldn't be a bad idea either, or a set piece just behind him for him to motion towards. I dunno. What do you think? (no pun intended)